The Story Thread: Discussion/Ideas

Okay, good.

I was thinking perhaps it could be inside a sealed letter. Do you know how people used to heat wax, then stamp the letter closed? Saul's group could have their own red wax seal, then. I think the parchment and envelope should be very fancy, as well, just to be ironic.

Group's name idea: Assemblage of __________

http://thesaurus.reference.com/browse/group

That sounds good...it seems more straightforward than cliched...

Arabelle Marsh:

Your father's crimes were unforgivable, and we have therefore killed him. Be forewarned: You are next.

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Eh, cheesy, or not? We could edit later, I suppose.

I think we should also come up with a name for Saul's "group."

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

Tourterelle wrote:

I agree with you. How about she wakes up, connects her vision with the murders, then later meets with Wyatt?

She should probably open the note somewhere in there as well.

Definitely. What should be written in the note?

Well, it has to be short and to the point, because Saul doesn't seem like the type to write a lengthy complaint.

Perhaps something that targets Arabelle? Something that says "You're next" but that specifically seems really cheesy.

Tourterelle wrote:

I agree with you. How about she wakes up, connects her vision with the murders, then later meets with Wyatt?

She should probably open the note somewhere in there as well.

Definitely. What should be written in the note?

I agree with you. How about she wakes up, connects her vision with the murders, then later meets with Wyatt? Maybe Wyatt can come to Pearl's house himself, searching for her.

She should probably open the note somewhere in there as well.

I read it and I loved it. Hmm...now we need to figure out what comes next. I'm assuming it is the next morning at Pearl's house, when the next passage starts. I think that Arabelle should meet with Wyatt in the next excerpt.

I just put it up a few minutes ago, if you want to check it out.

Tourterelle wrote:

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

That sounds like a good idea. Anyways, who is going to write the next part and what events will it cover?

I can write the next part, and as for the events, how about it covers her being asked if she's okay by various policemen, then her leaving.

How should she leave? Pearl takes her and Gus home in a carriage, perhaps?

I'll have it up tonight.

Good plan. I can't wait to read your part.

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

That sounds like a good idea. Anyways, who is going to write the next part and what events will it cover?

I can write the next part, and as for the events, how about it covers her being asked if she's okay by various policemen, then her leaving.

How should she leave? Pearl takes her and Gus home in a carriage, perhaps?

I'll have it up tonight.

That sounds like a good idea. Anyways, who is going to write the next part and what events will it cover?

Maybe right there, among policemen asking her if she's okay. Then, she could freak out and leave.

I ended the passage with Arabelle blacking out, so where should she wake up?

I like it so far, Zara! I can't think of any changes to be made.

Next, maybe we could have Arabelle run to her friend's house, but along the way she meets Wyatt?

Okay, I just posted my part. Again, it's just a first draft, so it might not read that well. I'll edit later if necesary (I probably will).

So what happens next? I didn't have Arabelle open the letter. All she did in my passage was spot it, and slip it into her dress.

If you want me to make any changes, just let me know.

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

Oh...you've been giving me good ideas. Now, I'll go and write this part (and my college essays), so I'll get off LC for some time. I'll be back later today though, hopefully with my part completed!

Sounds good.

See you then!

Oh...you've been giving me good ideas. Now, I'll go and write this part (and my college essays), so I'll get off LC for some time. I'll be back later today though, hopefully with my part completed!

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

So I'm going from the end of Louisa's passage to the beheading and the note. Should I include her going to sleep, contemplating everything going on around her?

I think so, but I doubt she would be at her house still; it would be swarming with police, right?

Maybe she stays with Pearl or Gus.

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

That would be interesting, if we made the carriage driver Saul himself. Then, Arabelle would see some of him, but not enough to connect him to her memory.

Ooh, interesting twist! How about she hears him whistling the tune from her vision when she leaves the carriage and enters the house?

Okay, I should have the passage up at some point today...

So I'm going from the end of Louisa's passage to the beheading and the note. Should I include her going to sleep, contemplating everything going on around her?

That would be interesting, if we made the carriage driver Saul himself. Then, Arabelle would see some of him, but not enough to connect him to her memory.

Zara Sahana 007 wrote:

I've got a quick question, though. Does Arabelle go to her house alone, or does somebody accompany her (considering that this is the Victorian era)?

For your other question: maybe she spends the rest of the day dwelling on her vision, then upon returning home, finds it came true: her parents were beheaded.

I suppose someone would accompany her. Maybe a carriage picks her up from school to take her home?

How about the carriage driver was the person who murdered her parents as well, and he was hired by Saul? She wouldn't know that though, not yet.

Unless Saul would do it himself? Your pick.

I've got a quick question, though. Does Arabelle go to her house alone, or does somebody accompany her (considering that this is the Victorian era)?

It's fine-we can always edit later. So, I'll be doing the next part? What am I going to write about? I'm guessing the end of that day, when Arabelle goes home and finds her parentss murdered with a note next to their corpses.